"Thank God this is the last one" said Dr Lancefield taking off his white robe. He was coming out of the Pathology Department when suddenly he saw four people; One of them was pushing a stretcher. Dr Lancefield glanced at the body covered with a blanket.
"Is this human?" Asked Dr Lancefield while he discovered what sort of men were around him. They all were alike dressing a dark blue uniform.
"We are not sure" answered one of them. "We are officers. We came from the Anthropology Department. Our scientists found out this corpse buried down and we need a professional".
Speechless, Dr Lancefield removed the blanket and observed it. Then, he stared at them, he was concerned. "Is this a joke?"
"Not at all. Look, we have no time. Some of us wanted to destroy it. We`re fleeing. If you´re interested in what or who this was you better start working. You only have 6 hours".
Dr Lancefield took the body into the autopsy room. "God, how could I start?" He took an empty sheet and his dissection instruments. He wrote: "male, age not calculable, 2.6 m height, 130 Kg weight" he stopped writing "It´s useless, how can I describe this sort of daemon with vestiges of wings and tail? The dissection might be more useful" He did all the procedures he knew, he observed tissues with the microscope, he mixed some chemicals and he ran several tests. Finally the men interrupted him.
"Time´s up. They´re coming. Give us what you have so far" the officer yelled.
"Impossible. What we have here, gentlemen, is not a human being. The information must be confidential until I......" violently one officer seized the file from his hand and they all ran away.
"God damned it. I supposed they´d do something similar" Dr Lancefield had shifted the documents; He sank them on formol and he threw them into the fire. "Now no one would ever know their secret".
jueves, 12 de marzo de 2009
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Hi Vaquero.
ResponderEliminarGreat opening paragraph. Good attention to details, specially the medical ones, without making them complicated to understand.
Hello Vaquero: Your story is a very good one! Since the beginning you cath our attention and along the story you introduced more interesting aspects.
ResponderEliminarHi Vaquero.
ResponderEliminarI enjoyed your story; it is simple and very well written. Good imagination. Good job.
HI Dr. Vaquero!!
ResponderEliminarSince the teacher read it in class, I liked it, I really think your story is good, I don´t know what to tell you,Is a good story, well structure, complete vocabulary, congratulations
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Hi Dr.
ResponderEliminarI like your story, I think you did a very good job,it has medical terms but are easy to understand.
Good job
Hey Doc
ResponderEliminarYou made an awesome story but you should add a better description of the corpse, maybe the smell or the look, also try to desribe the feeling of the doctor. Too bad that the story has to be really short, we can still get some juice out of our stories
Great story
Hi Eduardo:
ResponderEliminarIt was a great story I really enjoy it. It wasn't to long and it was too clear and understandable.
Hello Lalo!!!
ResponderEliminarI really like your story because it is original and you handle the mystery very well, you gave interesting details, it's a short story that could be longer to emphasize the main ideas. You have a good language use. Good job.
Hi Vaquero: I enjoy your story, simple but entertaining, you organize really well the structure and in general it was really good, I think is a shame you finished the story so rapidly because I would like to know what happened next, but good work.
ResponderEliminarHi Dr. Vaquero!
ResponderEliminarYour story is really good, its easy to follow and very interesting. Your descriptions were perfect. It would be interesting to read more about the story, you should write more(maybe not for the assignment).
Hi Vaquero,
ResponderEliminarI enjoyed your story. I like the organization and the words you used. i think you showed a very good vocabulary and you chose a topic excellent for you, since you had medical knowledge that gives the story more credibility.
Hi cowboy:
ResponderEliminarI think its a very good story since we both wrote the begining and the only thing I have to say could be that it finished so rapidly, everything happened so fast,I consider you could have been less descriptive but still its a very good story man, well done!!!
Hey Dr. Ed:
ResponderEliminarBesides being a well writen story in mechanics, I liked the fact that you mixed your knowledge as a doctor with your talent as a writer.
I really enjoyed it and I thik it was to bad it had to be written in a limited number of words.
Amazing story!
Hi Doctor, The topic that you chose was so good and interesting that you accomplished the goal by using an accurate vocabulary, an easy to follow structure and a perfect beginning for your story. I like your writing style, nice work.
ResponderEliminarHi doc., you have done a great work here.. your story was capable of achive the porpuse of the project , is easy to read, it has precise use of vocabulary, and of coourse it's very interesting, congratulations...
ResponderEliminarHello doc!!!
ResponderEliminarI liked your story. That science fiction taste that your tale gives is really good.
I didn't find mistakes, I believe that it is ready to be printed and send to a magazine or something like that!
Congratulations doctor, you have a good imagination.
See you.
Gabriel García
It`s good that you employs elements related to your major in your history, it gives a special touch.
ResponderEliminarHello Doctor!
ResponderEliminarI really liked your story because its interesting the way you added some medical terms that are easy to understand, you made it well structured and you used a bery good language.
Bere
Hello Mr. Vaquero
ResponderEliminarWell, what can I say. I don´t find mistakes because your story is excellent. First level story, well, in my perspective. You could expand it and make a medical novel. You take your profession, which is very complex and show us what you do in an easy and very interesting way. You are very creative. Keep showing the world the power of medicine.
Hi Vaquero!
ResponderEliminarYour story is very interesting, It keeps my attention in each paragraph. It´s well organized and with clear ideas. Congratulations!
Hello cowboy
ResponderEliminarYour story is about suspense you catch the attention of the reader in the first moment, is something like fiction, it is interesting